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Name: Victor Muntle (Vic-ter Munt-ul)
Hero Name: Guardian Wolf
Age (13-15): 14
Appearance:Messy, Dirty Blond Hair(color, not dirty hair);Blue glasses; Beautiful shiny, Teal,blue,green eyes; Blue T-Shirt that says “Just Do It” with the Nike simbol In neon green; Black shorts; white socks; Dark green sneakers;light skin;skinny
I don't think there are problems with the clothing, but try to elaborate a bit more. This will probably be the only time when you can put your character's appearance (since it really won't be mentioned as much when actually roleplay) somewhere.
What I mean by elaborating:
-specify the length of the hair? Is it close to his head, like a mop of hair, does it hang off his head, is it straight, etc.
-Skinny: Is he skinny because he doesn't eat much, is it because he's a thin person, stuff like that
-Skin tone: is it because he stays inside all the time, genetics, or is it an unhealthy shade of paleness?
Depending on your answers in this section, that means your personality will need to reflect it. A character's nature affects their appearance, so for the appearance you have to try and tie in why they would wear something or why this is the case with them. Some of the appearance options can just be "genetics" but stuff like skin-tone depends on their state of living
Personality: brave, Fierce, eager, smart, daring, takes risks, Selfless, friendly and polite at other times; hates death and dead things; sarcastic; does not care about first impressions, or other times, he does not care how you act, he is willing to be your friend; likes to help people; if someone does something nice to him, he returns the favor; likes to try to be friendly to even those who are not friendly to him; If someone is doing something mean to someone else, he will make a huge action he may regret; If you try to force him to eat meat, he will break your nose
So let me start with his good points first. Someone who is super outgoing is going to be put down. Why is he so outgoing? Is there a reason? The reason can result in a flaw. For instance, he's super outgoing because he wants to do anything to make friends. Like, maybe he's a single child and his parents don't interact with him much. If he's willing to take risks, this means he's hot-headed and won't listen to others. That's a flaw, something that could make others hate him. Also for his hate of death, did someone die to make him hate death? Also, being sarcastic might drive people away from him, so if he's really keen on making friends, he probably won't try to be sarcastic.
Cause, honestly, it kinda looks like he's desperate for friends? And that could be an interesting development. Possible conflict is doing more and more serious thngs to be friends with someone. These things would be done in secret so his "image" wouldn't be tarnished, and so when someone discovers him he might throw a fit or something.
Reiteration: There are several unfriendly people here. The only way I could see him "being friendly even if you're mean to him", is if he's really, really desperate to make friends.
I'm writing all these things, since it still doesn't seem like he has actual flaws. Retaliating when someone tries to force you to do something is fairly normal. Lashing out means he might have anger issues, another flaw, so that could be kept.
Please consider all of this. We want to make sure this FWRP is fun for everyone.
Hero Appearance: slippery, soft, gray, fluffy suit that is neon green on arms; Hands are bear, and feet have same dark green sneakers and white socks; pointed ears and fluffy soft, poofy tail; eyes are beautiful Shiny,Teal,Blue,green eyes; has black belt with loop to hold net-gun;light skin;skinny
One of the first things @Necro asked you to change: No neon on your suit. There is no reason for that neon to be there, and if it's just a little patch, why is it there? If anything, neon on the suit makes it easier for someone to target him and succeed in hitting him, even in the dark.
Hero Personality: =Equals Normal Personality (see “Personality above^) Are you sure about no difference? It can be fun to change personalities.
Weapon: gun that shoots nets Want to discuss the gun a bit more? Does it look like a gun? Is it like a grenade launcher? What's the color?
Powers: night-vision;really fast; can sniff out trails try to limit to to one power? Either he can have superspeed, or he can have enhanced senses (smell, hearing, sight, taste, and touch. Nightvision would fit in to this.)
Special Power (Cataclysm, Lucky Charm): Steel-claw (sorry if that sounds like a pokémon move) What does Steelclaw do? Not to mention, how low does the effect last? Remember that once they use their special power, the hero automatically reverts to their civilian form after 5 minutes. Ergo, the effect can't go beyond 5 minutes.
Miraculous Appearance: A Dark gray wristband without the Kwami, but with it, it is light gray, and the edges are neon green, and has a black zigzag line in the middle, the points on the zigzag are black rubber spikes
First is the counter: After the special power is used, the hero only has 5 minutes before they detransform. The Miraculous has to have a counter. Basically, after every minute, some sort of pattern disappears from the Miraculous to show that one minute has passed. Example: Ladybug's Miraculous earrings has five dots on each (like a ladybug's dots). With each minute that passes after she uses her special power, one dot disappears. Once all spots are gone, she detransforms.
So try and find a way to put something like that.
Since we can't have the neon green, maybe replace the neon green on the suit and the Miraculous with a lighter shade of gray.
Mental Strengths: clever, and makes good plans, a good sidekick I can see how he could be a sidekick. Tying in to what I wrote before. He might be desperate enough to agree with someone as much as he can so that they'd like him. I don't see a problem with him being clever, but why is he clever? If he's clever, he should have a reason for it.
Physical Strengths: Not to strong, but aims well and is thin Why is his thinness good? Does it make him faster?
Emotional Strengths: does not cry often, and is very good at hiding his emotions Ok...so he pents them up?
Mental Weaknesses: If something dies in front of him, he will go crazy and then have an emotional breakdown; If he eats meat, he will torture himself or tell someone his secrets Seems a bit extreme. "Torture" can just be self-harm which usually isn't life-threatening. Mostly just scratching on your arms. Also, I don't think eating meat could drive someone crazy.
Physical Weaknesses: not too strong; is allergic to evil, so when fighting evil, he has allergic reactions and must take pills soon after battle This is unrealistic? I don't think that's kinda possible, you don't have to do something so out of place. Also, you mentioned before that he's "not that strong". That's what you need to put here, not literal allergies.
Emotional Weaknesses (Akuma prey): If something dies in front of him, he will go crazy and then have an emotional breakdown; when he is faced with something way way way way way way way way way way to hard, he starts trying to torture everybody and must drink a gallon of coffee (which he hates) to stop. This is a bit too unrealistic and exaggerated. Unless someone has severe trauma, why would he try and hurt a bunch of people? It's fine if he gets really emotional (anger, sadness) at death because you've stated that he hates it, but the way he reacts should tie in to the backstory. Why does he hate death? I don't think the second half is necessary, with the torture and the coffee. Consider my idea written in the personality suggestion? About him being desperate? As long as you can pull it off without making the FWRP less fun for the others.
Other: vegetarian, even in wolf hero form
Age (13-15): N/A
Mental Strengths: N/A
Physical Strengths: N/A
Emotional Strengths: N/A
Physical Weaknesses: N/A
Emotional Weaknesses (Akuma prey):N/A
You, uh, don't need to submit all three forms at once. If this form is just empty, delete it. You don't need to send in a blank form, it'll help those who're trying to just scroll through.
Name: Timmy (like a timber wolf)
Animal: wolf You may want to find a more specific species? It's not necessary, but I would reccomend it to distinguish yourself from the other wolf heroes.
Personality: risky, agrees with others easily, smart, can talk, acts like a human I would imagine that almost all Kwami's act like humans?
Appearance: like a tiny light gray wolf with two really long and really poofy tails, three antennae on big sized head; beautiful shiny teal eyes Kwami's have a specific anatomy. A Kwami can't just be a tiny version of the animal. Check out images of kwami's from the real show. That's what's meant by "Kwami" anatomy. It has to be a weird chibi thing.
Food: miniature coconuts I think regular coconuts would be easier to find, but if this is really what you want then ok.